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Hey Ho the Derry-O. (Nonsense in the spirit of Alice)

Hey Ho the Derry-O
I found a black swan,
If Taleb doesn’t get you,
Infraticide surely will.

Hey Ho the Derry-O
I found a black swan,
The bell curve means nothing
If you’re not the Average Man.

Hey Ho the Derry-O
I found a black swan,
Peter Carey’s gonna get you,
No he’s not,
He’s over in America
Stuck there cos of
Covid
Which is fake news anyhoo.
Cos I got told
By a black swan
Down anti-vaxx way.
Lettuce all sing >>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Hey Ho the Derry-O
What did you do today?
I found a black swan
And brushed my teeth,
Had breakfast,
Wrote a poem
(Is “Poem’d” a word – it should be –
Much easier to say, “I poem’d today”
Better/n, “ I wrote a poem today”.)
I batter’d fish today
Before I found a black swan,
Who told me space/time
Is a myth in a wriggly-tiggly-stringy kind of way.

You thought there were three dimensions/demonsions/demonstrations,
Or maybe four,
How about 26, in a bosonic-moronic kind of way?

I haven’t got to the end of the bend at the ……
Cos the lettuce made me
Poem all day every day.
Hey Ho the Derry-O

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