The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "A New Day," effectively uses imagery to immerse the reader in a morning scene. The use of simple, direct language helps to create a vivid and tangible atmosphere. However, there are areas where the poem could benefit from further development.

1. Consistency in Punctuation: The poem lacks consistency in punctuation. Some lines end with a period, while others do not. This inconsistency can disrupt the flow of the poem and confuse the reader about the intended pauses and stops. It's advisable to review the poem for punctuation and ensure it's used consistently throughout.

2. Rhyme and Rhythm: The poem seems to follow an ABAB rhyme scheme in the first two stanzas but deviates in the last two. This sudden change can be jarring for the reader. If a rhyme scheme is to be used, it should be consistent throughout the poem, unless the deviation is intentional and serves a specific purpose. The rhythm of the poem could also be improved. Some lines are noticeably longer than others, which can disrupt the poem's rhythm.

3. Use of Imagery: The poem does well in using imagery to describe the scene. However, it could benefit from more varied and detailed descriptions. For instance, instead of simply stating "a few doves rocket by," the poem could describe the color of the doves, the sound of their wings, or their movement in more detail.

4. Show, Don't Tell: The poem could benefit from showing rather than telling. Instead of stating "squirrels start to bark at me," the poem could describe the sound of the bark, the reaction of the speaker, or the behavior of the squirrels. This would allow the reader to infer the squirrels' actions and the speaker's response, creating a more engaging and immersive experience.

5. Poetic Devices: The poem could benefit from the use of more poetic devices, such as metaphors, similes, or personification. These can add depth and complexity to the poem, making it more engaging and thought-provoking for the reader.

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with my minds eye. I very much doubt it is what you are seeing. So, more imagery will help us see the same things. More nouns and adjectives willl give it more relativity. The idea of show don't tell won't change much regarding imagery I believe, however will more than likely add to the poetry of the creation. I think rhyming and keeping it logical is forcing more imagery.

I open the door
and the morning air arives - - [No rhyme]
causing me to inhale
as the sun clears the woods.

Squirrels start to bark at me - [Keeping the meter]

Deer appear from somewhere,
they stop to look at me.
Then drop their heads without care, - [Confusing about how many deer.]
turn to walk away most carelessly.

The deer just gives a snort. - [Closer to the meter].

Mark is right, unless you are deaf, dumb and blind;
it is almost impossible to write a poem without seeing images in mind's eye.
~ Geezer.

I wonder what imagery would be added and how would it read. I know you can give the reader an HD scene,
Looking forward to reading more of yours.