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Locked In a Basement
No idea how this happened
I’m completely in the dark…
Stay calm and don’t get maddened
This basement’s pretty stark
Must come up with something
I need a lightbulb moment
Desperate times, at straws I’m clutching
No vision and the scent here’s potent
I now empathise with blind men
Albeit for just one day
I'm feeling like a caveman
Without wall drawings on display
Thirsty like a duck out of water
And hungry like a whale
Alone like a lamb to the slaughter
But I was freed to tell the tale
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Sun, 2024-05-05 15:10
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Rula
Sun, 2024-05-05 15:17
Hello M.Keen
Nice to read you.
Seems to be a bad experience. I would have liked to know how you've been locked in that basement.
I could feel all the depression you went through if that is a true experience.
Thank you for sharing
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Michael Keens
Sun, 2024-05-05 15:59
Definitely not true! It’s a
Definitely not true! It’s a poem, fiction is aloud :)
author commentMichael Keens
Sun, 2024-05-05 16:00
*allowed
*allowed
author commentRula
Sun, 2024-05-05 17:02
Of course it's allowed
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Rula
Sun, 2024-05-05 17:03
Of course it's allowed
and your writing is very much.
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paleoray
Fri, 2024-05-17 23:25
A fun little poem - glad you escaped
I liked the way you describe different fear and anxiety imagery that runs through your head while being locked and trapped in a basement. This seems to be the main emphasis of your piece. Your caveman imagery is my favorite. I’m not sure if I have heard of the simile as thirsty as a duck out of water before. Did you possibly mean as thirsty as a fish out of water? Anyway…nice job.