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Identity

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Sat, 2024-05-04 16:07

Fame is a goal
It is a legacy
It's a dream
Important to me

Standing in lights
Can blur reality
You're not yourself
But what others see

So if fame costs me
Who I am at heart
If that's the endgame
I don't want to start

I want to be known
I dream of the spotlight
But I'd throw it all away
To keep who I am tonight

If it destroys my spirit
Turns me into some entity
I'd burn fame to the ground
If it meant keeping my Identity

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Sat, 2024-05-04 22:10

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively explores the theme of identity in relation to fame. The contrast between the desire for recognition and the fear of losing oneself in the pursuit of fame is well-crafted. The use of imagery, such as standing in lights and burning fame to the ground, adds depth to the poem. Consider further developing the emotional impact by exploring specific examples or experiences that illustrate the internal conflict between fame and personal identity. Additionally, refining the flow and structure of the poem could enhance its overall impact on the reader.

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