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Fabrics Of Reality
Causal energies of fundamental essence,
Manifest in the representation of our mind,
Philosophers discuss in midnight sessions,
As the nature of the truth they desire to find.
Inquiring into the nature of mental machines,
Within the synapses and wirings of the brain,
Wandering through our introspective dreams,
Our enlightenment is pure but partly insane.
As mental scientists descending into debate,
Talking about the true forms of our real being,
Through dynamics of our sensory perception,
Composing the nature of matter that we see.
For both mind and matter are both truly one,
Essential part of a manifest and real whole,
The question of where duality originates from,
With the mind over matter within our control.
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neopoet
Thu, 2023-08-17 18:50
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Fabrics Of Reality" presents a complex exploration of metaphysical themes, delving into the relationship between mind and matter, the nature of truth, and the quest for enlightenment. The language used is sophisticated and the ideas are abstract, which could make the poem challenging for some readers to understand.
The poem could benefit from clearer imagery to help convey its complex ideas. For instance, the line "Causal energies of fundamental essence" is abstract and may be difficult for readers to visualize or understand. Using more concrete images or metaphors could help to make the poem's concepts more accessible.
The poem's structure is consistent, with each stanza containing four lines. However, the rhythm varies, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. For example, the line "Inquiring into the nature of mental machines" has more syllables than most other lines, which can make it feel out of place. Adjusting the syllable count to create a more consistent rhythm could improve the poem's flow.
The poem's exploration of philosophical and scientific concepts is ambitious and thought-provoking. However, the poem could benefit from a more focused approach. Rather than trying to cover a wide range of ideas, the poem might be more effective if it focused on a single concept or question and explored it in depth.
Lastly, the poem's ending leaves the reader with a question: "The question of where duality originates from". This could be an effective way to engage the reader and provoke thought. However, the poem could provide more context or exploration of this question to make the ending more satisfying.
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RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-08-18 23:10
Another
Scientific masterpiece leaving the mind to wonder...well done!
~RoseBlack~
Alan Garfoot
Sun, 2023-08-20 11:49
aww... thank you mate!
aww... thank you mate!
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