The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Broken Telephone" effectively uses the concept of a broken telephone as a metaphor for the challenges of communication, particularly in the realm of poetry. The metaphor is consistent throughout the poem, which helps to maintain the reader's engagement.

However, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery. While the metaphor of the broken telephone is clear, it is largely abstract. Incorporating more tangible details could help to ground the poem and make the metaphor feel more immediate and impactful.

The poem also seems to suggest a dichotomy between "simple minds" and "the learned," implying that only the latter can truly appreciate poetry. This could potentially alienate readers who do not see themselves as part of the "learned" group. It might be worth considering how this message could be communicated in a more inclusive way.

The final lines of the poem are somewhat confusing. The phrase "the beauty in the 'brokenness' of the technology of poetry" is a bit unclear. It might be helpful to clarify what is meant by "the technology of poetry" and how it relates to the concept of brokenness.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter. The current structure of the poem is quite free-form, which can make it feel a bit disjointed. Introducing a more regular rhythm could help to unify the poem and enhance its overall flow.

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Welcome to Neopoet. Nice to read new fresh poetry.
Words, poetry are some of the best ways to break the miscommunication.
I especially like the title. It brought me in and I enjoyed the read.
(IMO) some lines are unnecessary and trimming them won't hurt but it's up to the author 's opinion.
Thank you for sharing.